First feedback

Likes
Deborah " I like the story line in general , the way it flows from present to past ,back to present"


Josh " I like the chronological order of the way the film is presented and the effect of the sillouhette used to portray Lauren"


Ms Nair "Powerful opening, good how it starts with present to past"
Dislikes/Improvements


Josh " It would be more realistic to use a belt or rubberbands used to tie round her arm rather than cloth"




Abigail "To dramatic (..) unlikely for all events to happen to one person so young"


Ms Nair " Think about attention to detail , make it visually intense for example drugs and the baby objects".

Story board final

Storyboard First Draft

First draft of story board

Storyboard First Draft

Title ideas

This title is from a series called The wire, it is strongly drug related and is linked to our target film. I like the idea of the title because we can have headlines of people dieing and drug related themes and link it to our film, in the form of a title Forsaken. I like this idea and i would use it in my film if it was suitable

Moodboard

This is my moodboard, for my film Forsaken. The purpose of an moodboard is to show the different themes and colours that link in with your film. My film is verry depressing and sad and i've have showed this by the use of dark colours and depressing pictures. Even to the style of how i presented it you you can see the sinister side of it, through the old cinematic effect. I like how i presented my moadboard because it is done through a slideshow and i feel this is a great way to express the themes of the film. I also i feel this slideshow is effective because it has pictures which keep people intrested and also additional information to with it. My moadboard.

Location Recee

script

Script                    (Forsaken)

Slug –Internal – Dingy Wharehouse – Late afternoon

Setting of scene: in a dark abandoned warehouse with broken bottle everywhere the place is in a total state, there is know one in the room, but someone has been living here because there’s photos, needles, cigarettes etc on a table. 

Sound: We hear sinister music in the background, simmering gently raising in volume.

Camera Movement: There is a high angled pan from the top of the stairs; we see the back of a girl.

Camera Movement: The pan ends here. We get to a mid shot of her in front of a black door.

Sound: The music is slowly rising.

Camera Movement: There is then an over the shoulder shot of the back of girl and the door.

Camera Movement: There is a close up of the door handle and the girls hand is on it.

Camera movement: A mid shot of her opening, we then have an extra close up tilt and pan from previous shot. The shot will only reveal a small segment of her face.

Camera Movement:  There is then a long shot the girl walking towards the table. Then the shot moves in to a mid shot.

Camera Movement: There is now a long shot of the table, moving into a mid shot, then we see the next shot of a close up from the girls point of view. (The tile will appear here.)

Camera movement: The actor takes something from the table and we see an over the shoulder shoot of her looking at her next destination the chair. We see a long shot of her and the shot. There is a mid shot her sitting on the chair.

Camera Movement: There is then a close up shot of a bracelet and syringe in her hand. The there is a close up with her bracelet on. Then we see an extreme close up a photo.

Sound: We hear voice over of a mother and daughter when we the picture.

Camera Movement: We see along shot of someone’s are and syringe, then a mid shot of another photo.

Sound: We hear voice over of a mother and daughter when we the picture.

Camera Movement: We see a close up an arm and syringe being inserted. We see another picture burning a close up shot.

Sound: We hear voice over of a mother and daughter when we the picture.

Camera Movement: We see a pan of all the objects on the table, and then we see a pan of the arm and the bracelet, pan ends. Then fade out.